Will I Write about Rejection?

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Will I Write about Rejection?

11/12/10

Kloyde Caday

 

Will I write about rejection?

The thought of being doomed,

The dark alleys, failed resurrection,

The consequences when you assume?

 

Will I cry out,

Scream the loudest!

Until I forget how to shout,

Since I’m weary to protest?

 

Will I encounter

The dead skeletons,

Which I hide somewhere,

Buried for so long?

 

Will I write again?

But I wished not to;

I threw the thought away

For it will be of no use, I knew.

 

Then I write again,

Because I have to,

Exhume the pain

Inside the shoe.

 

And here I am.

Deprived by light,

Given only a dimmed lamp,

But still I write.

 

But still I write

Till the papers run out,

Till the pen is tired,

And the rhymes aren’t found.

 

… Will I write about rejection?

Or have I just done?

So will I be proud or dwell in lamentation,

And let these flames surround?


It says it ALL. This is actually an experiment integrating rhetorical questions in the poem. What do you think about the poem and the style? Is it effective? Peace!

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12 Responses »

  1. Yes it is effective because it makes the reader question himself while learning about your own self questioning. Even though it is not directly positive, it is not negative. It is neutral, and I like it. Nice style.

  2. not a fan. rhyme–which seemed contrived at most points and made for some awkward wording–doesn’t seem appropriate for such a serious subject. it’s also devoid of any specific imagery, which is really what makes a good poem.

  3. Some of the rhymes are forced (the shoe one in particular was weird for me), but I like the idea behind your poem. I think that can speak to a lot of people. Keep working on your craft and I’m sure it will get easier and better!

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